I have a membership site for local marketing that I am getting ready to launch. I have created a first draft of a video sales letter for the landing page. I already know that it needs some work this is just my first go around.

If you have experience in this area, please give me your honest feedback. No offense, but if you don't know what a good sales letter should look like don't waste my time

Thank you in advance!

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